As I work on the second of the Summer Fae stories, it’s been hijacked by the bad guy. And now we get a better glimpse on Matthew. Last we saw him he was being held in a fancy jail. Today he has an audience with the King.
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Matthew had to admit to himself he let it happen. I didn’t follow blindly. I was led with open eyes and a shattered heart. The line moved quickly and all fifty prisoners would be seen before lunch today. The guard came by this morning and told Matthew he was last on the list at King Brittan’s request.
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I really like his POV. Nice to see if we can find what Tessa fell for all those years ago. If those qualities are still there.
July 24, 2011 at 7:32 am
Loved the ‘shattered heart’ line. Intriguing last line as well. Looking forward to more.
July 24, 2011 at 9:29 am
“Matthew had to admit to himself he let it happen.” I like this a lot!
July 24, 2011 at 9:33 am
but what’s going to happen to him?
July 24, 2011 at 9:33 am
Intriguing. Wonder what the king has in store for him? Looking forward to more.
July 24, 2011 at 9:36 am
It never bodes well if you are first or last for anything–and at the king’s request? Not looking good for Matthew. But his POV gives us wonderful insight to him. Great six!
July 24, 2011 at 9:41 am
“open eyes and a shattered heart” – terrible and beautiful. Great snippet!
July 24, 2011 at 9:50 am
You so own his POV! a great strong and telling six.
July 24, 2011 at 10:02 am
You do paint a picture with your words!
Great 6!
July 24, 2011 at 10:02 am
I really like his POV too. Sometimes those bad boys are hard to resist, for writers and readers.
July 24, 2011 at 10:04 am
I’m not sure last is best in his case. Hope the king’s in a good mood by the time he’s seen the rest of the prisoners. Great snippet to entice.
July 24, 2011 at 10:08 am
Captivating snippet. I agree, his POV is great.
July 24, 2011 at 10:16 am
Of curse, I want to know why the king added Matthew to his list.
July 24, 2011 at 10:17 am
Last on the list? That sounds ominous.
July 24, 2011 at 10:28 am
Love a battered baddie. Well done!
July 24, 2011 at 10:30 am
Greeaaat. I hate being last in line.
July 24, 2011 at 10:46 am
Intriguing six and interesting character developing here. Got me very curious about what the king has to say.
July 24, 2011 at 11:35 am
“…open eyes and a shattered heart.” Terrific six!
July 24, 2011 at 12:02 pm
“I was led with open eyes and a shattered heart.” The narration is ordinary realism but you’ve given us the character’s sensibility in the way he generalizes, and now I want to know: what did his open eyes see, and did the shattered heart make that more clear or less?
July 24, 2011 at 12:06 pm
Maybe the King is saving the best till last? Nice six – full of suspense.
July 24, 2011 at 12:29 pm
Nothing wrong with a supremely interesting bad guy.
BTW…Dee’s comment is making me LOL.
July 24, 2011 at 12:56 pm
He sounds intriguing. Especially love the thoughts – very interesting!
July 24, 2011 at 1:08 pm
Great hook with that last line
July 24, 2011 at 1:40 pm
I’m with Dee. I hate being last in line. Maybe, in this case, it will work well for our hero.
July 24, 2011 at 1:58 pm
…very intriguing…
July 24, 2011 at 3:10 pm
I wonder why he is last on the list…
It’s so fun when a character takes over.
July 24, 2011 at 3:30 pm
“I was led with open eyes and a shattered heart.” Powerful line!
July 24, 2011 at 3:41 pm
Last on the list — is that good or bad? I’d have to keep reading to find out! Good six.
July 24, 2011 at 4:02 pm
Intriguing snippet. Can’t wait to see where this goes.
July 24, 2011 at 4:07 pm
Shattered heart? Now he has my sympathy! Wonder where things go from here.
July 24, 2011 at 4:25 pm
“Open eyes and a shattered heart” is lovely phrasing. Great six!
July 24, 2011 at 6:25 pm
Really like that first line–great!
July 24, 2011 at 6:58 pm
The fact that Matthew owns up says a lot about his personality. Also, because he’s the last to be seen at the King’s request, got my attention.
July 25, 2011 at 2:14 pm
Wow, that last line is fab. Well done